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The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use

The bar charts below shows the number of visits to a community website in the first and second year of use
#bar #visits #community #website #first #second #year
The table indicates the total use of community
website
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websites
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 in
first
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the first
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 two years. It provided
the
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statistics
in
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on
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 how
much
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many
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 people visited the
website
 in the beginning.
Further
, the study focused only
the
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on the
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 first and second
year
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years
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 of use.
To begin
 with, new
website
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websites
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at
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in
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 their early days
take
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takes
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 time until
it
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they
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 became
populer
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popular
 in
the
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apply
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society. It is
claer
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clear
 that
in
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at
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 the beginning of
internet
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the internet
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site
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,site
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 the numbers weren't unwelcome, as it shows the chart in September the publish of the site.
In addition
, from October until
August
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,August
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 the
website
remined
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remained
 stable in
the
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apply
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visitors
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number of visitors
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 the highest number reached was in August
by
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15000.
However
, in the second year of the
site
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,site
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 it became more common in
the
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apply
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society. Even though at the
beginnig
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beginning
 the number didn't grow, it increased sharply from November to July reaching 23000
visitor
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visitors
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.
According to
 the data provided the
website
 is rising dramatically and
become
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becoming
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 more popular
between
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among
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 people.
Also
, in the third
year
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,year
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 I expect to
acheive
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achieve
 higher in the total.
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