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The graph shows the estimated oil production capacity for several gulf countries between 1990 and 2010

The graph shows the estimated oil production capacity for several gulf countries between 1990 and 2010
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The given model compared
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oil
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the oil
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production
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 volume of various Gulf
countries
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 namely Iran, Iraq, Kuwait, Qatar,
Saudi
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Arabia
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 and the
UAE
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 between 1990 and 2010. As presented in the chart,
Saudi
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Arabia
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 had the highest volume
for
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of
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oil
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production
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 and its
production
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 increased significantly. Formerly, in 1990 Iraq and the
UAE
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 produced over 2
million
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barrels
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 of
oil
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 per day
whereas
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 the
production
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 for Kuwait and Qatar
were
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 less than 2
million
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barrels
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 and Iran produced 3
million
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barrels
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 per day.
Saudi
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Arabia
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 was the highest
oil
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-producing country that produced more than 8
million
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barrels
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 daily in 1990. After a decade,
oil
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production
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 grew in all the
countries
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 except the
UAE
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. In
UAE
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 the
production
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 showed small growth in 2010. The trends of higher
oil
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production
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 continued to be the same in all
countries
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 in 2005 except
in
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Qatar.
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, in 2010, Iran produced more than 4
million
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barrels
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 daily. Iraq, Kuwait and the
UAE
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 produced nearly 4
million
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barrels
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.
Saudi
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Arabia
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 produced much more
oil
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 than Gulf
countries
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 and remained the largest
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oil-producer
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oil producer
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 for all the mentioned years. In 2010
Saudi
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Arabia
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 produced almost 15
million
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barrels
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 per day, which is almost triple the volume produced by other Gulf
countries
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words oil, production, countries, saudi, arabia, uae, million, barrels with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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