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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. You are currently attending a course which is not the same as per the description in the admission brochure. Write a letter to the headmaster. In your letter, state which course you are enrolled in provide details about the noted differences suggest what actions would you like him to take

#minutes #course #description #admission #brochure #headmaster #differences #actions
Hello
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,Hello
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 Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction regarding the
course
 contents, which were not
same
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the same
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 as
available
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those available
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 in the admission
brochure
. I
have
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joined
Painting
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the Painting
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course
in
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apply
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last
 week
in
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at
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 our school. I have received
admission
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an admission
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brochure
 with some painting accessories. I go through
from
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apply
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all of them and
excited
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am excited
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 about
upcoming
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the upcoming
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course
.
At
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On
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 the day
of
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,of
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course
, I reached
to
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apply
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the school and eagerly
waiting
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waited
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 for the host. I have completed that
course
 with so many questions in my mind.
Firstly
, I noted that the host of the
course
 was different than what
were
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was
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 mentioned in the
brochure
.
Secondly
, there
were
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was
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 a proactive painting event mentioned after lunch, but in our
course
, no practical session
available
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was available
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 throughout the day.
Lastly
, you mentioned in the
brochure
 about lunch. But we got only breakfast and tea in the
course
.
This
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These
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are
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is
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 the points I observed during my
course
. I would like to suggest
to
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apply
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you arrange another same
course
 with
practical
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a practical
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session
Fix the agreement mistake
sessions
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include
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included
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.
Moreover
, it is better to call
old
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the old
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 host in the session, he is a good painter. I hope you understand my concern and would appreciate it if you could look into
this
 matter at your earliest convenience. Yours Sincerely, Jenish Patel
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