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The table illustrates the 6 languages which are the most popular in the world with the number of people use it.

The table illustrates the 6 languages which are the most popular in the world with the number of people use it.
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The table provides data on the most frequently used
languages
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 all over the world and the number of native
speakers
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 and
speakers
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 as the second
language
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.
It is clear that
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 Mandarin Chinese is the most popular
language
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 among the citizens of China, there are 900
million
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of
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apply
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native
speakers
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 and they make
almost
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up almost
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 90% of the total.
However
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, the most common
language
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 as an additional one is English,
number
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a number
the number
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 of foreign
speakers
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make
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makes
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 up 603
million
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 people. Probing
further
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, Hindi and Spanish
languages
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 are quite frequently used among both: native
speakers
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 and foreigners. There are more than 350
million
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 native
speakers
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for
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of
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 both.
However
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, there are 2
languages
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 that are quite popular among locals, but almost unpopular among others. Arabic and Portuguese have only 24 and 10
million
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speakers
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 as an additional
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language
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languages
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 relatively.
Overall
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, Asian
languages
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 have a lot of users among citizens of Asian countries, when European
languages
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 are used all over the world as a way of communication.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words languages, speakers, language, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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