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It is important for children to learn the different between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?

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It is believed that
punishment
 is necessary to educate
children
 to learn the difference between right and wrong at an small age. In my opinion, I partly agree with
this
 view.
This
 essay with first analyzes some of the main reasons and
then
 suggest possible solutions to teach good
behavior
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 to
children
. Indeed,
punishment
 is a better way to educate
children
 more faster and effectively. Proof of
this
 is when
children
 cheated on tests at school,
teachers
 found that they will punish the pupils by giving them low scores and cleaning the class
at the end
 of the lesson.
Hence
,
children
 will be afraid and know their action was wrong.
However
, depending
punishment
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 will harm effect on
children
. In mental problems,
children
 tend to scare all the time whenever they do wrong. In physical problems,
children
 will hurt their bodies with severe
punishment
.
For example
, in a lot of case abusive
punishment
 of
children
 to educate lead to they will have mental illness and harm to their health.
On the other hand
,
instead
 of using
punishment
 to educate
children
, parents, and
teachers
 could listen to
children
 to understand them more. In fact, parents and
teachers
 influence education. When
children
 make mistakes, parents and
teachers
 should listen to
children
’s opinions and
then
 analyze which was wrong and right. Not only
children
 could understand more but
also
 create a closer distance between parent and child or between professor and pupils. In conclusion,
punishment
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 could educate
children
 more faster and effectively.
However
, using
punishment
 too much can harm effect on the both physical and mental health of
children
.
Furthermore
, some solutions
such
 as listening to
children
’s views and analyzing between right and wrong.
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