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Many people today would argue that cinemas are becoming irrelevant due to new streaming services. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
people
 have been arguing that
cinemas
 are losing their popularity and importance because of online
movie
 applications. I mostly agree with that suggestion because these
services
 are cheaper than
cinemas
 and they present
diversity
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a diversity
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 of
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 in their systems.
Firstly
, access
of
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movie
 stream
services
affordable
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 for
people
.
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 to the cinema ticket values,
movie
 and series enthusiasts can become a member of service databases with cheap prices.
For instance
, members of these streams can gain three months access of
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contents
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 for two ticket
price
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prices
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 of
cinema
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the cinema
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. In
these situation
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, most
people
opt
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 buy some
contents
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 from service suppliers
instead
 of going to watch them.
Thus
,
cinemas
 have lost their impact on viewers.
Secondly
,
movie
 stream applications ensure
vast
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of
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 to their clients
while
cinema
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the cinema
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 presents
one time
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exhibition
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exhibitions
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. Consumers of these
services
 can reach these movies and series
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phone
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phones
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, television and notebook every time and everywhere. To illustrate that, if you miss the exhibition of a brand new film in
cinemas
, you can watch it at midnight
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 a holiday trip.
In addition
, some
services
 provide recording rights of
contents
 for free.
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, members can enjoy
contents
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 without
online
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 connection. In short,
due to
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above,
people
 have lost their ties with
cinemas
. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied with
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Although
,
cinemas
 are still important in
sight
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 of many artists and viewers, in my opinion, online streams have taken a considerable place in terms of
movie
 enthusiasts’ preference and it seems like they would capture
the
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