The pie charts show changes in American spending patterns between 1966 and 1996.

The pie charts show changes in American spending patterns between 1966 and 1996.
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These two pie charts illustrate the expenditures of American people in different categories from 1966 and 1996.
Overall
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food
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accounted for the largest share of individuals’ expenses in 1966,
whereas
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computer goods made up the least significant part of the chart.
In contrast
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, cars were the most popular type of expenditure in 1996, whilst book expenditures were the least share in that year. Looking at the details, in the year 1966,
food
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and cars accounted for the biggest proportion of spending with 44% and 23% respectively.
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, people were willing to spend on petrol and furniture an average of 9,5% of their money on, whilst restaurants and
food
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amounted to an average of 6,5%. As for computers, it was the least popular type in 1966, with a modest 1%. Meanwhile, in 1996, the highest outgoings were on cars, on average, by 22% more than in 1966. There was a reduction in
food
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spending by a hefty 30% which made
food
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the second highest type.
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, outgoings on petrol and furniture experienced a negligible decrease to 8%. As for money for restaurants, the figures doubled over the whole period in question.
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, expenses on books showed a significant fall to a mere 1%. Computers share rose considerably, rocketing to 10% from 1%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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