The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010.

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A glance at the two pie graphs provided reveals the percentage of Canadian selling on the internet market in terms of four parts in 2005 and 2010.

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it is clear that

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online buying behaviours had been reshaped, and people purchased different kinds of things in 2019 and 2020.

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, xx and xx experienced an upward trend

while

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clothing and xx showed an opposite direction. In the year of 2019, the rate of clothing was by far the highest, at 38%. Followed by the figure for home and kitchen was over a quarter, at 29%. The other two sectors()were both lower than 20%.

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, in 2020, dramatic growth showed in the electronic sector, which held the largest part of these categories, increasing to 45%, compared to the date of 2009, almost rising by 20%. Meanwhile, the number of clothing sales, and home and kitchen suffered a significant decrease, to only 22% and xx% respectively.

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The pie chart shows the online sales for retail sectors in Canada in the year 2005 & 2010.

In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadaysthan in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school programmes (for example working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agreee or disagree?

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The government should be responsible for providing retirees with financial support and care. While many people think that citizens should save money to take care of themselves when they are old. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Some school are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, While other schools have a very relaxed dress code. (What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?)