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Some people believe that it is the best to accept a bad situation,such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discusss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Recently, whilst opponents hold the view that negative
attitude
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 are not considered worse to
admission
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such
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 as unsatisfied function or few
of
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physical finance, proponents have another perspective. I am of the belief that if acceptance of
the
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difficult matters maybe not
bad
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be bad
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, improving skills will be better
to
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choice
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choose
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 different
life
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. On the one hand, economical exchanges have
been
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foreced
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forced
population
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the population
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 to accept a
trouble
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 manner.
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, there are many countries
suffer
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 from
depression
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of
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economy
thus
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, when individuals try seeking
about
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such
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apply
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a job to raise their income, they do not
argu
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argue
 with all conditions of any work because they do not have
varities
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varieties
 of chances .
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, in Egypt, as per a survey
coduct
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conducted
conduct
 by economical specialists, they
reavaled
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revealed
 that with
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repecussion
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repercussion
repercussions
 of
finance
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 many Egyptians were
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 to work in any field out of their element to survive.
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, what can be said is that
endurance
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the endurance
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 of
harships
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hardships
hardship
 maybe
increase
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increases
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experience
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the experience
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 of
life
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.
On the other hand
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, advocates believe that it is important to attempt to
promot
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promote
 qualifications and skills to have a better situation. To illustrate, when many individuals have
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a completely
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completely
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 realisation about all essential
requairments
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requirements
 to clarify disadvantage matters, they will able to
modificate
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medicate
 all
circumstancs
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circumstances
 that they faced despite
manner
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the manner
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 of their country.
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, in the Uk , most of its notion is more
intelilgents
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intelligent
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 and make efforts to be more active and choose their living.
Eventualy
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Eventually
, not only are increasing skills vital to high salaries, but
also
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 it is quintessential to live more well-being of
life
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. In conclusion,
after
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this
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 essay has manifested
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the pionts
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pionts
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points
that
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mentioned above, it can
reiterated
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 that admittance of
tired
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a tired
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 attitude
are
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is
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 not
radical
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a radical
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 solution, developing qualifications play a
kay
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key
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 role to have a good
life
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.I support that
life
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 is once, and it is important to make
advantures
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advantages
 to have a comfortable
living
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life
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.

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