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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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The maps give information about rebuilding an island for visitor amenities. The two main changes in the
map
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 are the pier and
restaurant
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the restaurant
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. The first
map
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 is totally empty with no building
and
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or
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 pathway;
however
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, there are a lot of palm trees and the majority of them are
in
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on
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 the east side of the
map
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.
Also
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, in the west, there is a beach. The second
map
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 has a lot to say. First and
for most
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foremost
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 is the pier which is added to bring
tourist
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tourists
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with
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by
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boat
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boats
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 and
it
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apply
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is an entrance to
island
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the island
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.
Moreover
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, there
are
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is
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 a lot of
way
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ways
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 which are created to get people where they want. Going forward to the north from
pier
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the pier
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, there is a reception which is surrounded by a path and at the top of
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map
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the map
a map
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, the restaurant is located.
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, two accommodation areas are constructed and there are situated
at
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on
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 the right and left side
if
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of
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 the reception. The
last
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 change is about
swimming
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the swimming
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 area,
locating
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located
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at
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on
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 the
north-west
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northwest
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 side of the
map
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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