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Today, more and more people use robots to do tasks at home and at work. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? Why?

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Modern technology has been developed day by day.It is believed by some individuals that, nowadays the majority numerous people utilize mechanization to do missions at home or at work.In my point of view,using
robots
 is a positive development for our life. There is no doubt that utilizing
robots
 or types of technology is a masterstroke,especially in chemical factories and difficult tasks.
For instance
, one of the best things about using
robots
 is that
this
 work will be quality and productive.
In other words
, the speedy motion of
robots
 will cause twice the income.
This
 is the main reason is that especially moving computerization can replace employees.
According to
 research that has been carried out by scientists at Arizona state university, about 80 per cent of factories in developed countries have important tasks carried out by
robots
. To be sure, there are some defects in using
robots
.Taking as an example,new computerization has better functions they are quite smart and is rather profitable.
Therefore
, some groups of humans prefer to
robots
 handcraft events at home.
As a result
, weight gain and diabetes increase among people. In the final analysis, despite the fact that
,
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 modern industrialization is productive and very necessary present day that's way its some faults are a normal situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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