The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart provides information about how to transform sugar cane into sugar.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that in order to change canes into seasoning take a lot of time and equipment;
moreover
, some steps require professional skills. A closer look at the diagram reveals that the process starts with growing the cane which may take about 12 to 18 months;
next,
the ingredients will be harvested by the farmers; not only by hand but
also
by machine. After that, the crushing process will begin and turns the ingredients into juice;
furthermore
, it will be filtered by the limestone filter to purify it.
Then
, the farmers use heat to evaporate the air and change the juice into syrup.
In addition
, the centrifuge is
also
an important part; if we skip
this
step, there will still have some crystals remaining in the syrup. The
last
part is to dry and cool the syrup, so it will change into sugar and be ready for usage.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • sugar cane
  • harvesting
  • transporting
  • factory
  • crushing
  • extracting
  • juice
  • filtering
  • impurities
  • heating
  • evaporating
  • syrup
  • boiling
  • crystallizing
  • sugar
  • separating
  • drying
  • packaging
  • distribution
  • stage
  • process
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