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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.
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The diagram illustrates the
proportion
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 of the total
world
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population
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 in four different countries:
India
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, China, the USA, and Japan over a 50-year period starting in 1950 and predicted figures for 2050.
Overall
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, the most initial impression from the chart is the statistics for the
proportion
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 of the
world
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population
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 decreased for all countries except
India
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.
Also
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,
India
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 is the only country that has increased the
proportion
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 of the
world
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population
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 by 2050. In 1950 and 2002, the
proportion
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 of the
world
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population
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 in China was the lion's share in all of the figures from approximately 23% to 20%.
Similarly
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, the USA and Japan
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 have a fluctuating decline of around 2% over the same period, accounting for 5% and 2.5% respectively in 2002.
In contrast
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, the opposite could be seen in
India
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 where the figure increased by approximately 15% to 17% in 2002.
On the other hand
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, in 2050, as can be
seen
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 that the figure for China and Japan continue to drop around 15% and 2% respectively,
while
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 the category of USA is likely to remain unchanged, at 5%.
Furthermore
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,
India
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's percentage of the total
world
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population
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 is projected to continue rising to nearly 19% in 2050.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, world, population, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • total world population
  • countries
  • 1950
  • 2003
  • projections
  • 2050
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
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