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Nowadays robots do more and more jobs instead of humans. Does this development have a more advantages than disadvantages?

#robots #jobs #humans #development
In
this
 era of technology,
robots
has
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cover
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 almost of human
works
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. From my personal point of view, based on
aforementioned
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 statement above,
robots
 increase safety and productivity in the workplace.
However
,
robot's
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 innovation increase jobless in the country.
Thus
,
this
 essay will
further
 elaborate on the benefits and drawbacks of
this
 development. In regard to the benefits in major shifting of
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the robot
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robot
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robots
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on
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 society's job is safety. Heavy machinery that runs at hot
temperature
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 or sharp objects are highly dangerous
which
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 can easily hurt a human being.
Therefore
, by delegating heavy tasks to a robot,
unwanted
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the unwanted
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incident
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 can be avoided in the future. To cite an example, it was found that after the
robots
 had
take
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 over the factories, the risk of workers getting injured by machines
are
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 relatively low.
Therefore
, the implementation of
this
 technology reduces those risks from happening.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks
on
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this
 situation. As people become more
reliable
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 on
robots
, it will
creates
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 a significant increase
on
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 the unemployment rate among
public
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. To elucidate, the number of
jobless
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the jobless
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issue
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 become a phenomenon nowadays
due to
lack
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 of vacancy offers from businesses or
company
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companies
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 to hire
a
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new
employee
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employees
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. Another point is
robots
 requires
high
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 cost of maintenance and their spare part
are
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hardly
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 to be found.
Consequently
, companies or organisation might
needs
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 to invest more which in return lead to
bankcuptcy
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bankruptcy
. To summarise, the innovation of
robots
 promotes a
safety
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 environment and improves productivity. Unfortunately,
this
 situation
also
 creates
an
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unemployment and a huge number of money
are
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 needed to ensure
it
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successness
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successes
.
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