Nowadays robots do more and more jobs instead of humans. Does this development have a more advantages than disadvantages?

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this
era of technology,
robots
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cover
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almost of human
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. From my personal point of view, based on
aforementioned
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statement above,
robots
increase safety and productivity in the workplace.
However
,
robot's
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innovation increase jobless in the country.
Thus
,
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essay will
further
elaborate on the benefits and drawbacks of
this
development. In regard to the benefits in major shifting of
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the robot
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robot
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on
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society's job is safety. Heavy machinery that runs at hot
temperature
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or sharp objects are highly dangerous
which
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can easily hurt a human being.
Therefore
, by delegating heavy tasks to a robot,
unwanted
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can be avoided in the future. To cite an example, it was found that after the
robots
had
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over the factories, the risk of workers getting injured by machines
are
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relatively low.
Therefore
, the implementation of
this
technology reduces those risks from happening.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks
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this
situation. As people become more
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on
robots
, it will
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a significant increase
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the unemployment rate among
public
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. To elucidate, the number of
jobless
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issue
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become a phenomenon nowadays
due to
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of vacancy offers from businesses or
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companies
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to hire
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new
employee
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. Another point is
robots
requires
high
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cost of maintenance and their spare part
are
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hardly
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to be found.
Consequently
, companies or organisation might
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to invest more which in return lead to
bankcuptcy
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bankruptcy
. To summarise, the innovation of
robots
promotes a
safety
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environment and improves productivity. Unfortunately,
this
situation
also
creates
an
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unemployment and a huge number of money
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needed to ensure
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successness
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successes
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