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Some people believe that education is important to get jobs while others believe it its experience and skills. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is commonly debated that if
people
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 want to have jobs, individuals have to graduate with high education degree
first,
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in spite of others who think rich in experience and skill. In my opinion
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those situations have advantages and disadvantages. I shall discuss both given arguments before arriving at any conclusion. In the beginning, the majority of employers or human resource development in companies always consider educational backgrounds before hiring employees. A high level of education can show those
people
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 have good knowledge
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 knowing well the theory that they can apply to the tasks that have been given to them.
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, the company that wants to hire an accountant will determine based on
people
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's major and
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 the degree individuals have.
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, graduating from a good university with excellent grades means that have good knowledge about their expertise and
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 understand many theories from many experts that they can apply to finish the duties.
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 they still need some guidance in the
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 field
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 a lack of experience handling a lot of real problems.
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, the communities have plenty of competencies and abilities. They had many experiences solving
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problem in their
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their previous jobs. They can
also
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 adapt easier to the environment of
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 situations.
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addition
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 they may
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 be capable of teamwork projects.
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, individuals experienced cashiers could be skilful do calculating and competent in social interaction with other
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, there are no big issues for them if they want to apply in the marketing area.
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, the educational background still matters since it is still needed to understand basic knowledge and theories, after that it is
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 can improve their career and salary. In the gist of the above contents, it can be concluded that stage education is important to gain a good job,
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 capabilities and experiences are still required to adapt easily to the
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 circumstances.
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, both of these are matters to reach a bright career.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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