One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweight the disadvantages?
In recent times, it is becoming increasingly common for
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who believe that improving of
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growth
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the growth
life
expectancy of Change preposition
in life
people
. I strongly believe that this
trend can have both positive and negative consequences in equal measure.
To begin
with, long-term health diseases can quickly treat by modern medical aids, consequently
, it can give a more flexible body for lifelong. In particular
, regular medical problems nowadays can easily be overcome as patients have fewer difficulties in their bodies than in the past. For example
, major problems like cancer, diabetes, influenza
, can tackle through therapy. Correct word choice
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As a result
, it gives patients more time to survive. Another glaring advantage of living longer is good fitness gives everyone hope of being together, such
as old persons
want to pass their time with grandchildren, and it seems to help their grandchildren learn something special like tradition, which can help all generations because many busy parents could not share their life experiences with their children.
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On the other hand
, although
improving medical care is effective for longevity, people
cannot always rely on medical care as it is costly. Firstly
, in the recent era, medical services are very expensive, which means it is not possible for everyone to take any treatment at any time. For instance
, older people
suffer from medical diseases, such
as diabetes and blood pressure it
can be solved by following a natural and healthy lifestyle. Correct pronoun usage
which
In addition
, senior citizens are not working, they will have no money and pensions to pay for their lifestyle, medicine, and treatments.
In conclusion, the increase in life expectancy has Add an article
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the disadvantage
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disadvantages
such
as costly services, nevertheless
, advantages as
fighting diseases and good health surpass the drawbacks.Correct quantifier usage
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