One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweight the disadvantages?
In recent times, it is becoming increasingly common for
people
who believe that improving Use synonyms
of
medical care become Remove the preposition
apply
cause
of Add an article
the cause
a cause
growth
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the growth
life
expectancy of Change preposition
in life
people
. I strongly believe that Use synonyms
this
trend can have both positive and negative consequences in equal measure.
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To begin
with, long-term health diseases can quickly treat by modern medical aids, Linking Words
consequently
, it can give a more flexible body for lifelong. Linking Words
In particular
, regular medical problems nowadays can easily be overcome as patients have fewer difficulties in their bodies than in the past. Linking Words
For example
, major problems like cancer, diabetes, Linking Words
influenza
, can tackle through therapy. Correct word choice
and influenza
As a result
, it gives patients more time to survive. Another glaring advantage of living longer is good fitness gives everyone hope of being together, Linking Words
such
as old Linking Words
persons
want to pass their time with grandchildren, and it seems to help their grandchildren learn something special like tradition, which can help all generations because many busy parents could not share their life experiences with their children.
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people
On the other hand
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although
improving medical care is effective for longevity, Linking Words
people
cannot always rely on medical care as it is costly. Use synonyms
Firstly
, in the recent era, medical services are very expensive, which means it is not possible for everyone to take any treatment at any time. Linking Words
For instance
, older Linking Words
people
suffer from medical diseases, Use synonyms
such
as diabetes and blood pressure Linking Words
it
can be solved by following a natural and healthy lifestyle. Correct pronoun usage
which
In addition
, senior citizens are not working, they will have no money and pensions to pay for their lifestyle, medicine, and treatments.
In conclusion, the increase in life expectancy has Linking Words
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a disadvantage
the disadvantage
disadvantage
, Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantages
such
as costly services, Linking Words
nevertheless
, advantages Linking Words
as
fighting diseases and good health surpass the drawbacks.Correct quantifier usage
such as
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