Some people say that students who achieve the highest scores in their exams should be rewarded. Other say that whose show progress should be rewarded instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Although
it is sometimes thought that rewarding ought to
that
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that student
those students
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students
who get top marks in the
school
exams, other people believe that the focus should be on what they progress. In my opinion, I consider that high scores
students
have better career options in the future life. On the one hand, some people think that children, who get
highest
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the highest
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marks in
the
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apply
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school
exams, should be rewarded and I agree.
In other words
, those children
are concentrate
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are concentrating
are concentrated
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on all
subjects
when exams take by
school
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the school
show examples
.
Moreover
, they are more thinkable towards all directions of topics.
For example
,
students
prepare
subjects
like math, history, physics, and biology and they have curious about all the
subjects
.
Additionally
, they can
also
think
all
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of all
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the different topics in their mind.
Furthermore
, these
students
have more choices to select their career because they have knowledge of all
subjects
.
On the other hand
, it is often believed that it is better if the
rewarding
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reward
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at
school
for
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apply
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those
students
who show progress.
In other words
, those
students
are only capable of doing well in certain
subjects
.
Therefore
, they are more thinkable towards only one topic.
For example
, some younger
students
like only
math’s
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math
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subject
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subjects
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and they do many
experiment
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experiments
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in that subject and got
well
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good
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progress in it.
Another
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reasons are that they got
well paid
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well-paid
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job
in
particular
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a particular
the particular
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industry in which they have interested. In conclusion,
while
people may vary in their opinions, I think that children have
better
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a better
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chance to succeed both in
school
and later in life if they are got
highest
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the highest
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marks in
the
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apply
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school
.
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