Food can be produced much more cheaply today because of improved fertilisers and better machinery. However, some of the methods used to do this may be dangerous to human health and may have negative effects on local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is true that
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produced
much more cheaply nowadays. Add a missing verb
are produced
Furthermore
, these two methods originate meager
effects on human health and may be dangerous to local communities. Change the spelling
meagre
However
, believe that this
case for
everyone, and there are still many people who understand these drawbacks.
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is for
To begin
with, it is undeniable that many people's daily consumption is consistent from
artificial, nurtured productions. Change preposition
with
This
is especially true for basic and casual people, I mean their annual salary is around ten thousand dollars, such
as security, gardeners, and many more. For example
, during our life, we consume a variety of types of fruits, vegetables, and other eating products. Furthermore
, we use them with any limitations in our ordinary life. In my opinion, the government should tackle that issue to improve humanity's valuable life. In addition
, there is another way to make the products cheaper. First,
the government should encourage entrepreneurs to open new natural ways of nurturing. Secondly
, give the empty lands to gardeners for creating a new source of oxygen.
On the other hand
, using excessive amounts of fertilisers can lead us
to water, Correct pronoun usage
apply
air
pollution and littering the environment. Correct word choice
and air
For example
, global pollution currently disposing
erosion of the ozone layer. Add the preposition
ofdisposing
According to
some researchers, in the upcoming 30 years, the layer was fundamentally vanished
from the earth. In my way of thinking, the entire population of Change to the active voice
fundamentally vanished
has fundamentally vanished
earth
should contribute to Add an article
the earth
prevent
the world from pollution. Change the verb form
preventing
Firstly
, the government should take a remedy to decrease the amount
of working hours in factories.
In conclusion, it is true that food can be produced more cheaply today, Change the quantifier
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this
should not come at the expense of human health and local communities. It is important to ensure that food production is done in a sustainable and responsible manner.Correct word choice
but this
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