“Children all over the world should learn to speak a single, universal language fluently in addition to their native language.” To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It has been
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that children in the world should speak a universal
language
as fluent as a native
language
.  Since
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children are more absorbing languages well
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to adults, personally I agree that children should learn
common
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language
. Already, English has been
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language
in the present
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in IT fields. Most of the contents consist of programming words
are
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using English. If you google something about code, contents that you could get using English and other
language
are totally different in
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of information. As
world
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is more changing to
automobile
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, getting fluent
to
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universal
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a universal
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language
is important.
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