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In many cities, more people are living alone. Why is this the case? Is this a positive or negative development?

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People
 choose to live on their own for many personal reasons. In my opinion, living alone can transform one’s
life
 in a positive way. The most significant reason that
people
 decide to leave their parent’s homes is to attain more privacy.
For example
, some adults want to move in with their boyfriends or girlfriends to get to know each other before they enter legal marriage. Alternatively, if they are living together in their parent’s place,
this
 can possibly lead to an awkward position. Another reason can be that some
people
 want to come out of their comfort zone and be more independent to face the challenges which their
life
 presents.
In addition
 to that
people
 live alone to be able to focus more on their work and study as there can be interruptions when they live
together with
 family. Having said the reasons for living alone in the above paragraph,
this
 practice is a positive development.
First,
people
 can find out themselves without any others’ influence and interventions. It is very important to understand what we need and wants for our
life
 before setting our
life
 goals, education majors and careers.
Second,
people
 can gradually develop management and socializing skills when they live alone since they need to manage everything from daily chores to paying bills. Those skill sets are beneficial for their lives as they help them to cope with obstacles throughout their
life
. In conclusion, nowadays
people
 in many cities opt to live on their own mainly for their personal development and I strongly support everyone should give it a try once in their
life
.
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