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WRITING TASK 2 Animals “Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals.” Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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People have different views about the importance of
Zoo
parks
 .
While
zoos
 seem to be
such
 a prison for
animals
 , I believe that there is no better place to keep wild
habitat
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 alive when they are likely to disappear . On the one hand , it is commonly claimed that
zoo
parks
 are not only dangerous places for both human and animal life , but
also
 they do not noticeably expand the countries' economy , but sometimes it works for drawbacks.
Firstly
, the  natural behaviour of livestock can be destroyed because of the fences that do not give them the freedom to move where they want though the size of the fences is widened enough . It is fact that wild
animals
 are gifted with natural skills
such
 as fighting for
a
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prey or opting for a pair , and surviving abilities are sharpened in the wildlife. Without those characteristics, they have almost no distinctive points to controllable robotics.
Secondly
 ,
although
 the supervisors of
such
 protecting places make their
animals
 well-behaved for acting non-harmful roles for visitors behind the fencing , there are enough bad experiences that
consequently
 end with deep injuries when
the
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young people get to near them .
Finally
, the economy
also
 should be considered as a main factor to keep these kinds of
parks
on
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working. It is a fact that there are some well-known
zoo
parks
 that attract more people and can  invest
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itself
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 financially because of their popularity .
However
, there could be plenty of
zoos
 that have been making no profits for the countries'
economy
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 which set up them.  The expenses for breeding 
zoo
animals
 and providing workers with
sufficient
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 salary can be a good example
for
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this
 and  most times become
weightened
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heightened
weighted
 than earned money from visitors . Even extra funds than normal are needed to ensure those places with work-life.
On the other hand
 ,  some assume that
zoo
parks
 can be much more beneficial than we think . There would be exact  reasons why we should maintain and support
zoos
 . One of them is   preventing   rare
animals
 from
the
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extinction .For ages ,
a great deal of
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 species have died out ,
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got
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 lost as well. As scientists claim that there are
first
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zoo
 regions to save
plethora
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 of habitats from becoming
extincted
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extinct
 and other areas standing behind
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zoo
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.
With
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 keeping wild
animals
 inside the areas , we can define the infections or
disease
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diseases
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 they might spread to
surroundings
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 they live near and humans are
also
 one of them to get infected . Gaining valuable experience from learning these species in person is available with
zoos
 .
Along with
this
 , we have more opportunities to control
over
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the
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 death and birth of them . In conclusion ,  I strongly believe that
zoos
 can bring a great number of advantages that we should take to save wildlife rather than becoming a place for blaming .
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