WRITING TASK 2 Animals “Some people think that zoos are cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals.” Discuss both views and give your own opinion

People have different views about the importance of

Zoo

parks

.

While

zoos

seem to be

such

a prison for

animals

, I believe that there is no better place to keep wild

habitat

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alive when they are likely to disappear . On the one hand , it is commonly claimed that

zoo

parks

are not only dangerous places for both human and animal life , but

also

they do not noticeably expand the countries' economy , but sometimes it works for drawbacks.

Firstly

, the  natural behaviour of livestock can be destroyed because of the fences that do not give them the freedom to move where they want though the size of the fences is widened enough . It is fact that wild

animals

are gifted with natural skills

such

as fighting for

a

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prey or opting for a pair , and surviving abilities are sharpened in the wildlife. Without those characteristics, they have almost no distinctive points to controllable robotics.

Secondly

,

although

the supervisors of

such

protecting places make their

animals

well-behaved for acting non-harmful roles for visitors behind the fencing , there are enough bad experiences that

consequently

end with deep injuries when

the

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young people get to near them .

Finally

, the economy

also

should be considered as a main factor to keep these kinds of

parks

on

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working. It is a fact that there are some well-known

zoo

parks

that attract more people and can  invest

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in itself

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itself

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financially because of their popularity .

However

, there could be plenty of

zoos

that have been making no profits for the countries'

economy

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which set up them.  The expenses for breeding 

zoo

animals

and providing workers with

sufficient

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salary can be a good example

for

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this

and  most times become

weightened

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heightened

weighted

than earned money from visitors . Even extra funds than normal are needed to ensure those places with work-life.

On the other hand

,  some assume that

zoo

parks

can be much more beneficial than we think . There would be exact  reasons why we should maintain and support

zoos

. One of them is   preventing   rare

animals

from

the

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extinction .For ages ,

a great deal of

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species have died out ,

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and got

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got

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lost as well. As scientists claim that there are

first

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zoo

regions to save

plethora

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a plethora

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of habitats from becoming

extincted

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extinct

and other areas standing behind

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the zoo

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zoo

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zoos

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.

With

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keeping wild

animals

inside the areas , we can define the infections or

disease

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diseases

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they might spread to

surroundings

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the surroundings

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they live near and humans are

also

one of them to get infected . Gaining valuable experience from learning these species in person is available with

zoos

.

Along with

this

, we have more opportunities to control

over

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the

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death and birth of them . In conclusion ,  I strongly believe that

zoos

can bring a great number of advantages that we should take to save wildlife rather than becoming a place for blaming .