Some people say that playing computer games is bad for children, whereas others say that it has positive effects on the way children develop. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

Nowadays,
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computer
games
have a significant role in
entertainment
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industry and have become an undeniable part of the world. Still, there are various thoughts about them. Some believe these
games
have negative effects on
children
while
others think the opposite. In my opinion,
computer
games
can be quite beneficial in developing
children
’s functional skills, but only if played in moderation. There are many advantages
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playing
computer
games
.
To begin
with, it has been proved that playing
video
games
improves
brain’s
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function in terms of coordination between body organs like eyes and hands. People who play
video
games
react better and faster to different events. Another skill that can be improved by
video
games
is problem solving as there are usually puzzles in
video
games
.
Furthermore
,
video
games
can attract
children
and encourage them to learn how to use modern technology. They
also
make
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learning entertaining for
children
. What is more, with
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introduction of online multiplayer
games
,
children
now can learn organizing and
team-work
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to achieve their
goal
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.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks
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these technological inventions. For instance, these
games
can be pretty addicting and there should be
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time management for playing them
otherwise
they will take over people’s other plans like studies or
works
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work
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. Another problem with
such
hobbies is that there
are
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not much movement in them.
children
just sit and play for hours
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can cause
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obesity and since these
games
are usually played alone they can even result in social isolation. In conclusion,
while
people may vary in their opinion about
computer
games
, I believe with a little supervision,
children
can enjoy playing
video
games
along
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acquiring amazing skills.
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