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The chart below show what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing thier undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The chart below show what Anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing thier undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologists in work after five years. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie chart illustrates how Anthropology
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 are employed after receiving an academic degree from one university and their earnings in three varieties of sectors after 5 years of work.
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, larger half of alumna work on a full-time job, and the highest salaries are paid by the government sector. Workers with full-time jobs show the largest portion of
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, 52%, and the number of part-time grads is 15%. In second place are unemployed
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

, who take up 12%. Full-time postgrad study and not-known
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

 take up 8% of destinations. The least number of graduates, particularly 5% chose part-time work plus postgrad study. A significant majority of 50% of salaries are 100.000$+, contrast 40% of freelance consultants earn from 75.000$ to 99.000$ and the same number of employers earn more than 100.000$. 35% of private companies pay between 50.000$ and 75.000$, and 30% of their workes can earn more than100.000$. The freelance consultants' sector and the government sector demonstrate that 5% of their workers earn from 25.000$ to 50.000$.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words alumni with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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