You recently travelled by train on a long journey and you experienced various problems. Write a letter to the train company's head office. In your letter, - Give the details of your journey, including the date, time and where you sat - explain the problems that happened and express your dissatisfaction - ask about what action will be taken to improve the service
Dear manager
hope you find
this
letter in spirit and good radiant ,I have been travelling with the train in the next week,hence
,I am writing this
letter to explain some problems ,I have started the journey with my husband for honeymoon,in addition
,we start the trip from Berlin to Paris,I have chosen this
way because we want to enjoy the trip and see the road ,such
as beautiful jungles ,rivers ,besides
, I have chosen the summer season for seeing green colourful of the nature,finally
when we will arrive we want to see many famous places,for instance
:Louver museum,Eifel tower and etc.
As you know about Paris,it's a big city with many tourists ,also
,they can see the rate of robbery, and loss of many things such
as passports,money,and important and valuable things ,consequently
,I appreciate you ,if it is possible you have given an
unique and single room in the train for me and husband ,in more details a room Change the article
a
that is
more convenient and comfortable.
Finally
,I am ready to pay more money to have a complete room,I am waiting for your answer to the letter and if you have any questions about anything please do not hesitate .
yours sincerely ,
Pardis GhobadiSubmitted by pardisghobadi on
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task achievement
While you included many details about your travel plans, you didn't clearly explain the problems you encountered during the journey. Be sure to address each part of the prompt in your response.
coherence cohesion
Try to organize your ideas better by separating different points into distinct paragraphs. Each paragraph should convey a single main idea or aspect of your experience for better clarity.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent tone throughout the letter. Your request for a single room feels out of place in a letter about encountering problems during a journey. Make sure the tone fits the context appropriately.
greeting and closing
Good attempt at starting the letter with a greeting and closing it appropriately.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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