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Your friend is asking for your advice. He is going to university and can't decide whether to study music or business management. Write a letter - How you felt when you got the letter - What the good points are for both sides and - What your advice is

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Hello Saman, How are you doing? My heartiest congratulations on your recent achievement. Now you have a great opportunity to find the best path in your life to be successful. I was in the same shoes which you are standing right now. Music is what you could follow
along with
 your inherent talents. If you find yourself a good entertainer to others, obviously you have to learn that. There will be thousands of open doors for you to earn money
as well as
 success.
Hence
, you should find it correctly though. It would be a pleasant surprise for me to see you as a musician.
Conversely
, the other option has way different aspects of working environments It's a highly recognised profession in any part of the globe.
Consequently
, you will have countless opportunities to make yourself successful. At
last
, my clear suggestion is to find yourself before moving on with any of these streams.
However
, you will have a great future ahead. Hope we'll get in touch soon. Your's friend, Vishva
Submitted by vishvaisuranga on

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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