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The animal species are becoming extinct due to human activities on land and in sea. What are the reasons and solutions?

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Nowadays the world is facing a new problem, the extinction of its wild nature and it is happening faster than everyone thought.
According to
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 WWF (World Wild Federation), the list of endangered species
are
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 increasing day by day. Sadly the main culprits behind
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 catastrophe
is
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 none other than humans. One of the human activities which threaten the
wildlifelife
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wildlife life
population
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 is deforestation, because of
the
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fast industrialization and
population
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 growth almost two third of the total forest has vanished from the face of the earth.
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,
animals
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 lose their natural habitat and they have become more vulnerable to
life
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-threatening situations.
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, poaching is another human-sponsored cruelty which affects the
population
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 of
animals
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 like tigers and pandas. Humans are hunting these
animals
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 for skin and fur. On top of that pollution is the other major man-made activity that troubles the
life
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 of animal species
in
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 both land and sea. Oil spills from underwater oil wells and garbages from ships and boats are affecting marine
life
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also
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. To tackle
this
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 situation, the authorities, NGOs and societies should work together as one. Governments should introduce strict rules and regulations to control deforestation and animal hunting. Non-Governmental Organizations should keep an eye on everything happening in the
wild
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wildlife
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life
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 and
among
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all the common people should realize the importance of
wild
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wildlife
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life
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. People should be educated about the consequences of
fast
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the fast
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 extinction of rare
animals
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.
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,governments should set up captive facilities and
zoo's
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 to protect species
at
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on
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 the verge of extinction in order to keep them alive. In conclusion,
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 humans are the prime suspects behind
this
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 alarming scenario, we can not blame ourselves only.There are other factors which are
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 affecting the wild and aquatic
life
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population
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 like natural disasters, diseases and climate changes.
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