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The diagrams below show the plan of a medical centre in 2008 and 2010

The diagrams below show the plan of a medical centre in 2008 and 2010
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The maps illustrate how a medical centre changed between 2008 and 2010
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, the hospital underwent a number of dramatic changes, the most important of which is the development of five new rooms used for different purposes. The treatment
room
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 in the northwest corner remained the same.
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, the doctor’s offices were reduced in size coming as the addition of one had been introduced. In the north-east of the centre, a new store
room
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 was built beside the new office.
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, the corridor in the middle was extended. In the southwest corner of the medical centre, a large
room
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 was constructed containing an education
room
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 and a mother and child
room
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 in there. Next to these was the waiting
room
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 with the reception and staff office which could access by the main entrance stayed unchanged.
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, the laboratory located in the southeast of the hospital remained unchanged, but a pharmacy was added in the north of the lab in 2010.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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