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Many people believe that countries should produce food for all population and import as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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globalization, trade between countries is growing rapidly, including in
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. Many people argue that countries should supply
food
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 for all populations and avoid importing
food
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. Personally, I do not agree with
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 idea. There is no doubt that if the agricultural
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 depends on international corporations, a great amount of cheap imported
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 products would flood into the local
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 and have adverse impacts on domestic producers. They cannot obtain enough income from agriculture and may be reluctant to cultivate.
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, more and more local farmers would give up and
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 security would be threatened especially during international conflict and instability.
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, quality inspection of imported
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 is
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 a challenge. Imported
food
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 varies widely in quality
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 and some of which may even carry viruses. Without proper management, poor-quality imported
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 would pose a threat to people’s lives and health.
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, it is unrealistic to produce the entire diverse
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 required by all populations. some nations like some polar nations do not have enough land which is suitable for agriculture and they are incapable of cultivating tropical fruits and vegetables. So they are more likely to depend on imported
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 to a considerable extent.
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, some processed foods would require more than simply controlled temperatures and humidity if
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 idea were put into action, and its production would cause great harm to the environment by releasing greenhouse gases and discharging wastewater. In a nutshell, I believe that imported
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 should play an important role in the
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market
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 because it can help diversify
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 on people’s tables. But the government should strengthen supervision and limit the quantity to protect local farmers’
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 share to avoid threats to domestic
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 safety.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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