In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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The phenomenon of some
people
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thinking that
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an
apartment
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has more benefits than
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in a rental
house
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has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
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's views on
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issue in question may be, I personally believe that it is necessary that we have our own properties. Regarding the negative points of
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though, the most noticeable drawback is that the cost of buying a
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is too expensive for most of the citizens in many countries.
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, in Hong Kong, most
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need to borrow
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from the bank in turn they can afford an
apartment
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. Even though they need a few decades to pay back the loan.
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, there are a lot of
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who feel
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stress from
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afraid
of losing their jobs.
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, if
people
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rent
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a house
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house
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from others, they can live more freely with the pressure from
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financial pressure. Despite the aforementioned disadvantages, I still believe that
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should
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properties for several reasons, probably the most significant
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is that property is more
valueable
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valuable
than
money
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. To illustrate, the main
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between buying and renting
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house
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is that the first
one
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is to change your
money
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to a right of
an
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apartment
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ownership, and the other
one
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is just spending without any
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benefits or profits.
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the most important thing is that the value of
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will
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decline because most countries are creating
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constantly.
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, buying a property is better than renting
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in financial view. Under
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line of thinking, it seems to me that
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purchasing an
apartment
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will make more pressure
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people
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to bear, buying a
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is an essential method in order to protect their
money
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and preserve their living in the future.
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, I believe
that is
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a positive situation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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