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Nowadays, people of all ages from certain parts of the world spend most time at home rather than going outdoors. Discuss the reasons, is this negative or positive development?

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These days the public like to stay at
home
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,rather than go out, because it may be a financial factor or they
wanted
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towanted
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 spend quality
time
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 with family members,here going to discuss various factors ,whether it is a favourable condition or not. As people are busy with work and nowadays both men and women are busy ,not getting enough
time
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 to spend with kids ,so they are more interested to spend
time
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 at
home
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also
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 there
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are
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is
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are
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 financial burdens,by staying at
home
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 ,can reduce spending on an outing like,transport, restaurants or any other visiting place charges,more overeating homemade food is more healthy and tasty . there are very few disadvantages
,
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apply
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when kids want to go out with their parents, they very less explore of the world,children should explore the world and update their knowledge update, without it,they can't compete
the
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in the
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 world ,
moreover
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 staying at
home
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 , having
time
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 with each other should be appreciable. In ,conclusion spending
time
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 with family members at
birth
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their birth
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 place always
have
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has
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 a positive impact as well, saving additional charges on households and
also
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 having stress free life cause sharing is caring when caring for each other, there is no way that feels stressed.
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