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Nowadays university education is considered very important for people's future. However, there are a lot of successful people who didn't get higher education. Do you think that higher education is necessary to succeed in life? Justify your opinion with relevant examples.

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Higher
education
 is often viewed as the key to future success.It broadens our perspectives, enhances our knowledge, and connects us with
people
 who share similar interests.There are examples of
people
 who have achieved great success without a university or college
degree
.They are one of the richest
people
 in the world. Some perfect examples of really successful
people
 without any higher
education
 are Bill Gates,Mark Zuckerberg, and Steve Jobs.They are all billionaires now and one of the most intelligent
people
 in the world.They all have something in common.They had exceptional ideas and took risks to pursue them.They are a good example for young
people
,but that doesn't mean everybody will succeed without
education
.In ,
fact
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 these individuals are an exception rather than the norm,,
However
 not everybody has
such
 extraordinary ideas.In my ,opinion it is really important for every person to have a
degree
 because it can be beneficial in every aspect of life.In fact,most job descriptions require higher
education
,making it difficult to secure a good job without a
degree
. In conclusion,
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, my higher
education
 is absolutely necessary for achieving success.Of ,course there are some exceptions,but for the average ,person a
degree
 is the most reliable path to a comfortable living.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foundation
  • critical thinking
  • innovators
  • vocational training
  • persistence
  • soft skills
  • adaptability
  • non-traditional pathways
  • lifelong learning
  • disparities
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