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Some believe that eventually all jobs will be done by artificially intelligent robots. What is your opinion?

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In all countries around the
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 armed
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 personnel are common.
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, the necessity of arming them is debatable. Some
people
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 claim that it leads to the unprecedented attack on common
people
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 and perhaps to
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 terrorism and violence,
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 I concur with the side of those who argue that it is essential to maintain law and order. The reasons are manifold for my support will be discussed in
this
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 essay. On the one hand, I totally disagree with the notion that
state
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 terrorism is raising because of armed
police
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officers
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. In fact, many
people
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 who believe
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 notion are not ready to understand the fact that the
police
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 department is directly controlled by the home department of government. And
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 there are myriad public councils are working to strictly monitor the judicial use of these weapons by
police
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officers
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.
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, these
people
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 often come with an example of some random
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 encounters with common
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.
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 these incidents are true, I believe these are mostly accidental and the
police
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officers
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 who are responsible for these
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 have been punished severely for their negligence.
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, the country's entire internal security management is under the control of the
police
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 department. In order to maintain these superiorly, they are in the need to develop some sort of fear among
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.
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 fear in my opinion is healthy for the betterment of society.
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,
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 and
state
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 security forces are the first-line workers who need to witness some dangerous situations. Despite their personal well-being, they work towards the welfare and security of the
people
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.
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, recently one of the
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 inspectors in my neighbourhood was brutally attacked by some petty thieves during a situation when he tried to arrest them for shoplifting.
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 incident made me think in favour of armed
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officers
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 that if he was allowed to carry his weapon, he would have got prevented the attack. In conclusion, not only do armed
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officers
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 use their weapons to maintain law and order, but
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 for their self-protection.
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, I totally agree that arming
police
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officers
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 will never lead to
state
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 terrorism or violence, in fact, it prevents these.
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