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Governments should spend tax money on public libraries rather than public transportation improvement. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #tax #money #libraries #transportation #improvement
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Nowadays, numerous people realize the importance of
libraries
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 to their daily life and work.
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, residents think their government should spend tax budget on public
libraries
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 rather than public means of
transportation
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.
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, in my viewpoint,
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 disagree with their opinion because of the On the one hand, public
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 bring local residents a large number of benefits
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 as silent places that help them more concentrate on working, or a vast area to finish group assignments.
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, they
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 are big data centres, because of the various books here,
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 humans often choose them to look up information for research.
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, my high school is beside a library,
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 after my school, I go to one to study with my friends and discuss
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several problems in studying. I feel my efficiency in studying in
libraries
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 is much higher than in my house, and numerous kinds of research have the same conclusion.
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, public
transportation
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 has significantly
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 to saving driving time
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 and reducing traffic jams. Developed countries are a good example of
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 statement, a huge number of public
transportation
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 like underground electrical trains, buses, etc help traffic jams can be seen in these countries. Another benefit of investment in public
transportation
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 is connecting rural areas with urban, which can make overpopulation go down, and people can work far from their houses.
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, both of them have different benefits,
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 governments should consider cautiously to use of dweller tax efficiency and bring the greatest benefit possible.
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