The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens.

The given pie charts compare the expenses in 7 different categories in 1966 and 1996 by American Citizens.
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The pie charts illustrate the expenditures of the American people on seven essential items between the years 1966 and 1996.
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, as observed in the year 1966 the citizens spent most on food and
cars
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,
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less on computers. Meanwhile, by 1996 there is a drastic shift seen that more people choose
cars
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over other important things
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making books the lowest of their interest. Way back in 1966, food is imperative for Americans which garnered the highest percentage (roughly 44%). Closely followed by
cars
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at 23%. Trailing behind Furniture, Petrol, Restaurants, books, and computers at 10%,9%,7%,6%, and 1%, respectively, which the latter being the lowest. Turning to the year 1996, a notable significant change happened to make
cars
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the primary need of the people in America at approximately 45%,
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spending more than half of the per cent on other categories. Food and restaurant had a similar percentage (14%). Petrol and Furniture shared the same per cent (8%).
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making computers the second lowest at just 10%.
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a small fraction was noted on books (1%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words cars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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