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Today level of sress at the work place are increasing trmendously. What are the causes? what are the problem can create?

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The
stress
,
that is
 made regarding our professional life, is highly
inscreased
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increased
 nowadays.
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discuss
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 possible reasons and
concequences
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consequences
 for
this
 phenomenon. First of all, the increasing
level
 of
stress
 in
such
a high levels
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 especially in the present time ,which becomes something easily noticeable, has many reasons.
To begin
 with,
the
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 capitalism ,which controls our life in every direction, leads us to
work
 extra time ,
as well as
 sometimes even
in
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 holidays, which
gradualy
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gradually
 leads to
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 up
stress
 piece after piece.
In addition
 to the declining
economey
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economy
economies
 around the entire world.
Although
,
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 the
indevedual’s
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individual’s
saleries
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salaries
 have improved, the
expences
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expenses
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 that everyone spends on basic needs increased as well which leads
eventualy
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eventually
 to higher
stress
 levels at the
work
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workplace
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place
 because the people, who are working,feel they are not being paid enough
although
 the
work
 increases.
secondly
, serious issues may
consequente
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consequence
 from
stress
 at the
work
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workplace
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place
, either on
the
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 personal
level
, on the
level
 of the
work
 environment
it self
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itself
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 or even on the mental
heath’s
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heath
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level
.
for example
, the developed tension in
work
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workplace
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place
 leads to waste of huge amount of time ,
as a result
 of conflict between coworkers.
As well as
 , it directly
effects
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 the person’s health , mentally or
physicaly
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physically
.To illustrate, a recent study published by Uk researchers
show
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 that
stress
 leads to health conditions
sush
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such
 as, cardiac diseases and diabetes.Not only that
,
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 but
also
 it affects the psychological status, as it leads to increased levels of
axiety
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anxiety
 and depression,
especailly
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especially
 in the younger generations,who
work
 more than half a day ,just trying to prove themselves.
to conclude
,
stress
 in the workplace is an issue in almost every country around the world.
However
, the causes are
devided
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divided
decided
 by the economy and
the
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work
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workplace
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place
 policy .it is something to be
consederd
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considered
 because we can not afford its results for longer periods.
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