The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The picture demonstrates the process of instant
noodles
procedure in manufactory.
Use synonyms
This
diagram shows eight stages from bringing flour to the factory Linking Words
and
to Correct word choice
apply
the
packagingCorrect article usage
apply
them
. In the Correct pronoun usage
apply
following
we will describe Add a comma
,following
completely
.
Correct pronoun usage
it completely
Firstly
, the flour which was Linking Words
Add an article
a store
the store
store
in the silos transferred to the factory, Wrong verb form
stored
Linking Words
then
it mixed with two other ingredients which are water and oil to Correct word choice
and then
be become
dough. After that, the prepared dough under Change to the active voice
become
have become
pressure
of rollers formed as sheets and Add an article
the pressure
are
ready to change to Correct subject-verb agreement
is
the
strips. In the fifth stage, they are coming to the boiling part, and in the Correct article usage
apply
next
the cooked and dried Add a comma
,next
noodles
existed. In the seventh step, the Use synonyms
noodles
, some dried vegetables and, spices in paper cups Use synonyms
packed
and Add a missing verb
are packed
then
Linking Words
labeled
. In the final step, the Change the spelling
labelled
labeled
and packed Change the spelling
labelled
noodles
cups would be ready for spreading among stores for sealing.Use synonyms
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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