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We have three important parts of education: reading, writing and math. Some people think every child will benefit from a fourth skill added to the list: computer skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people propose that
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skills
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 should be regarded as an additional part of education.
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 I do agree that
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skills
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 are indispensable in
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's times, I do not agree that these should be added as a subject. Undoubtedly, computers play an important role in our life. They have become an indispensable part of our lives. In workplaces and even in homes, they have made their presence felt. Computers, topped with the internet have brought many new opportunities in the lives of people.
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 perhaps why some people opine that
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skills
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 should be added to the
school
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 curricula.
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, important as
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skills
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 may be in
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's world, I do not think it necessarily means
computer
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skills
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 should be taught to every child in
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. Most schoolchildren
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 are under heavy academic pressure and so, adding
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skills
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 to their curriculum surely means an extra burden to them.
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, it has to be noted that
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's
computer
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 technologies are ever-changing. Software is frequently updated.
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 means that the
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skills
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 students learn
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 will probably become obsolete in a few months.
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, the development of technologies has made most of
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's computers user-friendly.
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, even a person who is totally
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 illiterate can learn the minimum basics in a few hours and the rest is all practice.
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, many young children can proficiently use an I-pad to read or write. So, to those children who can already operate a
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 well, it is obvious that there is no need to teach them a skill they are already good at.
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,
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 it has to be admitted that
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skills
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 are crucial
today
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, the nature of
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 technologies (ever-changing, user-friendly) has made
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skills
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 an unnecessary skill for
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 children to learn.
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this
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 reason, I disagree with the opinion that
computer
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skills
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 should be added to the
school
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 curriculum.
Submitted by manekiyaadil on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital age
  • tech-savvy
  • curriculum
  • digital literacy
  • programming
  • coding
  • disseminated
  • digital divide
  • opportunities
  • neglected
  • creativity
  • problem-solving skills
  • navigate
  • manipulate
  • environments
  • excessive focus
  • physical inactivity
  • interpersonal skills
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