Many people around the world are still relying on the private car as their major mean of transportation. Describe some of the problems over-reliance on cars can cause, and suggest some solutions

Many

people

who are living

different

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countries, still depend on a private

car

for

transportation

purposes. There is a problem related to private

transportation

, especially over-reliance on

cars

, and

this

essay will discuss possible causes and possible solutions for

this

problem. The main causes of reliance on private

cars

are

air

pollution

and

traffic

congestion.

For those

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who consider using a private

car

without thinking

the

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consequences should be aware of

air

pollution

mostly. Polluted

air

has a poor impact on human health and natural habitat.

Air

pollution

results in

increased

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incidence of respiratory diseases

such

as lung cancer and COPD.

Moreover

,

air

pollution

collapses many

species

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respiratory

system

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systems

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.

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, doves are the most

effected

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bird species

from

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the

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pollution

and their oxygen capacity

reduced

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nearly

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%50.

People

should reduce their carbon footprint

with

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changing their

transportation

habits. Some citizens have more than 2 private

cars

and they must

be consider

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owning only 1 private

car

for

an

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each household. The latter

causes

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of

demanding

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on

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for

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private

cars

is

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are

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traffic

congestion in

a rush hours

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rush hours

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.

People

should be aware of the

time

they spent

on

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in

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traffic

. They have to understand their precious

time

wasting

unnecessary

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.

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Istanbul

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an

avarage

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average

worker spent %20 of his/her

time

at

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roads

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the roads

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.

This

time

will never

restored

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back and affects

people

's

remained

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life.

Futhermore

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Furthermore

, driving in the middle of

the

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traffic

is considered dangerous for employees.

According to

their mood, they can easily

distracted

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with

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their phones or radios during

traffic

.

Thus

, public

transportation

can be the key

for

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these distractors, especially

for

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during

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rush hours. In conclusion, over-reliance on private

cars

is

serious

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problem around the world.

People

should

be consider

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consider

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using public

transportation

to decrease their carbon footprints.

In addition

, using

private

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a private

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car

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cars

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can be dangerous during rush hours and

people

can be easily distracted

with

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external factors.