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Some people think that government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects in order for a country to develop and progress. To what extent do you agree or disagre

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It is often discussed by the people about the areas where the government should increase their investment.
Although
 everyone emphasises
about
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the importance of education, which departments should be preferred has divided has become a topic of discussion. Some say that more investment in teaching science is needed for better prosperity of the country
while
 others contest
this
 claim. I strongly believe that
this
 approach of focusing
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 subject alone is incorrect.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons in detail and provide a justification to back my stance. Right from banking to ensuring security, almost all the work is done with the help of machines and artificial intelligence. Considering
this
, it is extremely resourceful to have a good number of techies as not only they can automate our
day to day
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 work but will
also
 help in
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 and development area. Take Turkey for an instance, it has immensely prospered in the
last
 two decades because of the presence of
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 number of technology experts.
On the other hand
, the demand and scope in teaching sciences have rapidly decreased as robots are easily being designed
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 as tutors.
Therefore
,
government
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 should rather consider investing more in technology which is the need of the hour.
Also
, there are different types of products and services needed the consumers around the globe. All
the
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professions are equally crucial in their existence. A good illustration of
this
 is the fact that a mechanical engineer plays an important role in designing automobiles
while
 oil companies
processes
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refining
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 of petrol and diesel.
Likewise
, stressing more on one particular department may slow down other important departments which will lead to creating an imbalance in fulfilling the need of
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society.
Therefore
,
this
 approach will lead to
having
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adverse effects on
he
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 country with most of
educated
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 staff seeming even more homogenous.
To conclude
, there are several reasons why
government
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 should not invest more
on
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 teaching science. Not only it is a field which is no longer in demand
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it will
also
 slow down
growth
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the growth
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 of other sectors.
Therefore
, governments should not pay heed to the voices of those who are suggesting these dubious measures.
Submitted by Mohammed Danishuddin on

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