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Advances in technology and automation have reduced the need for manual labour. Therefore, working hours should be reduced. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Modern
technology
 and automatic processes have decreased the manual working
hours
 of people.
Therefore
 I would suggest manual
labour
 should be reduced which makes life easy for the people but has a huge disadvantage when it comes to the community who faces tough challenges every day trying to
work
hours
 and
hours
 to earn for their families. Nowadays when looking from the company's point of view it seems better and easy for them to make their
work
 efficient.
For instance
, there are companies which use robotics
technology
 which is automated to
work
accordingly
 for their day-to-day production, but
this
technology
 has two sides to it because if the robots do not perform well enough, a lot of money and time has to be applied to them to
work
 efficiently.
According to
 the comparison of
technology
 and manual
labour
, working
hours
 seem to be more on the technologically based production and for man working
hours
, it may depend because in an organization not every person works at the same
work
 rate as robots who
work
 at a consistent level which is produced by the system.
Therefore
 I think that automation plays a crucial role but if you tick the right boxes manual
labour
 can
also
 play it right thinking as to where and why you are using them in a company. So 'money and time' are the only two factors affecting
this
 modern computer-based production and manual
work
. In conclusion, I agree with the condition 'yes' modern
technology
 place a crucial part in working
hours
 but manual
labour
 can
also
 be applied to the same, but without decreasing working
hours
 in both departments the organization can efficiently achieve the ultimate goal or even exceed it to many more challenges.
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