In some countries, people follow the latest fashion and hair styles. In your opinion what is influencing this? Is this a good or bad thing.

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The current generation is too

much

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dwelled in fashion, especially the youth.

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is a result of social

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people

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following the movie and sports icons and modelling them. In my opinion,

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has

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impact on

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by affecting their self-esteem and loss of money.

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, when individuals try to follow the trend made by

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they have to invest a lot of their income

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latest

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design

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and high brands which impacts their savings.

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, a person from

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middle class

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family, earning 1000

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luxuary

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luxury

brands like Gucci or Prada would be left with less money to meet their basic needs. leaving with nothing in

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for an emergency need.

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, not meeting social standards impact

people

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's mental health.

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can

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one's self-esteem and even lead to depression. To exemplify, there was an Indian news article which stated a 15year old tried to end her life as her parents didn't agree to buy a

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luxury

watch.

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child had peer pressure to meet her group's standards which she couldn't and fell into

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the anxiety

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losing her friends.

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is the extreme

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it can

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our thought processing and

wellbeing

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, following current

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and

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luxury

brands

results

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people

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to spend

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a lot of money, leaving nothing for

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the daily

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expense

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. Meanwhile, Youth especially are found to suffer from ongoing mental health issues

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of not

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to afford

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lavishness.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

244 words

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