Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many people argue that
professionals
after finishing their
study
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should
work
in the
country
where they did it. Meanwhile, others think that they can
work
wherever they want. In my opinion,
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professionals
can have a job anywhere
depend
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on their purposes which
why
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is why
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they did their training. Some people believe that
professionals
should
work
in the
country
where they studied the subject
due to
the applicable
knowledge
with
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in
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environment
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an environment
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where they learn. The institutions that conduct training in some subjects tend to suit their modules with the condition in that place. Hopefully, the alumni after graduation can apply the
knowledge
that they studied in the societies where the subject are learned.
As a result
, they will become
professionals
who bring benefits
in
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the
country
.
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other
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hand, others assume that
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professionals
have
a
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freedom to choose where they want to
work
to enhance their
knowledge
and earn more money. Some
professionals
are prone to think that other countries have numerous
knowledge
that they did not study yet before.
Thus
, they are likely to go to
different
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a different
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country
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countries
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to expand their
knowledge
in the
work place
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workplace
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.
In addition
, several countries in the world pay their employee higher than
other
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another country
other countries
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country
. That means the
professionals
who want to get more income tend to choose
country
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a country
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with a high salary.
For example
, some engineers in my
country
, Indonesia,
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like to
work
in
developed
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country
due to
earning
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more money.
To sum up
, for people who say that
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professionals
should
work
in the place where they studied because what they learn is what suit with the condition of the environment,
while
others argue that
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apply
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professionals
can
work
where they wish
due to
enriching
knowledge
and
amount
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the amount
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of wages. Personally,
the
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apply
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professionals
have
a
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the
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freedom to
work
in the countries which they want depending on
the
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apply
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their purposes
studying
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for studying
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that subject.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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