The charts below give information about the amount of electricity used.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about the amount of electricity used. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graphs provide information on the daily usage of electricity in a household in winter and summer and the comparison based on categories of utilisation.
Overall
, the highest consumption was seen in winter, which rose up to 40000 units in comparison with 20000 units in summer. The majority of the power was consumed for heating rooms and water. In winter the demand for electric current rose from 35000 to about 5000 units,
however
by 24 hours it dropped back to the starting level.
Whereas
, in summer, though there was fluctuation the rate remained around 15000 to 20000. The majority of power was consumed by
warming
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room and water, which was about 52.5%. Whilst, the lowest proportion was used for lighting, TV, radio,
along with
vaccum
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vacuum
cleaners, food mixers, and electric tools, which constitute about 15%
percent
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each. Meanwhile,
oven
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ovens
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,
kettle
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and washing
machine
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machines
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constitute 17.5
percent
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per cent
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of the
overall
electricity usage.
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  • Electricity consumption
  • Kilowatt-hours (kWh)
  • Energy demand
  • Power grid
  • Renewable energy sources
  • Non-renewable energy sources
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Conservation efforts
  • Industrial sector
  • Residential sector
  • Commercial sector
  • Fluctuation
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Efficiency improvements
  • Seasonal variation
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