You are going to have a family party in a private room in a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter, say: ● why you need to use this private room ● what you need them to provide for the party ● inquire about the price of the food you are ordering
Dear Sir/Madam,
I hope you are doing great. I am writing
this
letter to gather information about the services provided by your hotel and to book a private room for a family gathering.
Firstly
, I would like to state that I want to organize a party on my sister’s 18th birthday with my family members and relatives. So, I need a private room for the gathering of 15 people.
Moreover
, I also
require the decoration service provided by your hotel, which is very famous throughout the town. It should be decorated with white and pink balloons and ribbons along with
tables and chairs because these are her favourite colours. Lastly
, I would be very grateful if you could arrange some music system for celebration
.
Correct article usage
the celebration
Furthermore
, I have also
heard that your catering service provide
the best food in the town. Could you please send me Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
menu
with your speciality with Add an article
a menu
price
Add an article
a price
the price
.
So, I can decide Change the punctuation
?
the
menu for the party.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours Faithfully,
Tajinder SinghChange preposition
on the
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coherence cohesion
Make sure to have a clear introduction and conclusion to your letter to strongly establish the context and purpose.
task achievement
Although the ideas in the paragraphs pertain to the task, you might want to expand on some details, such as giving specific instructions or preferences regarding food or decoration rather than just mentioning them.
coherence cohesion
There was a decent attempt at cohesion, but be mindful of arranging information in a logical sequence for better flow from one idea to the next.
task achievement
The tone used was mostly appropriate, though some sentences may benefit from a more formal structure.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite