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Celebrities make a very good living out of media attention and have chosen to live in the public spotlight. They have no right to complain when they feel the media are intruding on their privacy. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is undeniable that famous
people
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 have exploited
media
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 attention and have selected to live in the public spotlight.
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, some
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 propound that they cannot make a
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complaint
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 to the
media
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 when they want to protect their
privacy
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. I am of opinion that the
stars
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 are just ordinary
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, so they can complain
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to those
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 who intrude
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on them
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. On the one hand, most public figures are unavoidable to be a target of the
media
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, especially modern
media
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 which is extremely fast when it comes to reporting celebrities' news or
gossips
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gossip
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. To put it simply, the more they are well-known, the more they are
being
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followed by their fans and news publishers.
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, most blockbuster movie
stars
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 cannot live an ordinary life because they will be surrounded by their fans and the
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 everywhere they take
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visit.
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, their personal lives
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may
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 be exposed to the mass
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 frequently, which leads to
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 issues.
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, celebrities should have
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the rights
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rights
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right
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 to complain
those
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about those
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 who ruin their
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. To put it
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, if the
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 publish their private lifestyles or close friends too much, they are supposed to sue or complain
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about it
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it
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immediately.
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, members of society should respect
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famous
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 by raising awareness.
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, in Thailand, most Thais will not take a picture of
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 without permission or disrupt
stars
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 when they are in the public. Needless to say, just like other professions, everyone should have a chance to protect their
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. In conclusion, even though the famous take
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advantage
from
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of
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 the
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, they are supposed to have their personal time, so it is totally right for them to complain
those
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to those
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 who
not
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 respect them. From my perspective, the
stars
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 are normal
people
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 like us,
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, they can make a
complain
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complaint
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 just in case.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Public spotlight
  • Media intrusion
  • Social contract
  • Paparazzi
  • Ethical limits
  • Mental health
  • Privacy rights
  • Public persona
  • Harassment
  • Media scrutiny
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