The chart below give the information about the percentage of the adults population who were overweight in four different countries in 1980,1990,2000

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The given bar chart provides the proportion of overweight people in

Japan

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Finland

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, Australia, and the

USA

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in the years 1980,1990, and 200'.

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, it can be seen that the

USA

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has always had the highest percentages among the analyzed countries,

whereas

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Japan

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has had the lowest portion in all three decades.

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it is clear that

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the number of fat people steadily grew in the 30-year period in all four countries. Australia and the

USA

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were the countries having the greatest proportions of obese communities.

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Australia, in 1980, had a similar percentage to

Finland

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's one, it first experienced a slight increase in 1990 and

then

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a notable one in 2000, increasing its fraction by a total of around 10%. Regarding the

USA

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, it approximately doubled its percentage, going from 15% of the overweight population to over 30%.

Japan

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and

Finland

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had a quite low number of obese inhabitants, as

Japan

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always remained under 5% of its total population, and the maximum of overweight people living in

Finland

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was, in 2000, just around half of the

USA

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proportion in 1990.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

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4 paragraphs

181 words

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The chart below give the information about the percentage of the adults population who were overweight in four different countries in 1980,1990,2000

The increasing prevalence of convenience food will lead to traditional methods of cooking disappearing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems might this difference cause? How might these problems be reduced?

Write a letter to your relative. In your letter: • Explain when and how long you will be in town. • Ask whether you can stay at their home. • Offer to pay for yourself.

Increasingly, many young people are deciding to work or study in other countries. What are the causes of this phenomenon? Do you think it is a positive or negative situation?