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Some people spend most of their lives close to where they were born. What might be the reason for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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 are working and acquiring
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 in the world. In comparison with,
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new knowledge from different
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culture
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 of
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life have different
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Settlement
  • Hometown
  • Roots
  • Community
  • Emotional attachment
  • Sense of familiarity
  • Social network
  • Bond
  • Safety
  • Proximity
  • Support system
  • Heritage
  • Limited options
  • Risk aversion
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Unfamiliarity
  • Exploration
  • Adventurous spirit
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