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Some people think it’s a good idea to wear uniform at work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is growing sentiment today that wearing a
uniform
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 at work is better than a personal fashion style. From my point of view, I extremely agree with
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 statement because it brings many advantages for both
companies
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 and individuals
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 ,for individuals' benefit, wearing a
uniform
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 will help to reduce discriminatory status. In a
company
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, everyone has different backgrounds and economic conditions. If everyone follows a
uniform
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 rule of the
company
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, it will create a peaceful work environment, respect for each other and no discrimination. From that point, bosses will weigh capital correctly and not focus much on their outfits or other objective factors.
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, wearing a
uniform
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 will help increase the
company
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's recognition. If a
company
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 has a large of talent and will be successful in the future. The human resource systems will be easier to recognise when all employees wear uniforms.
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, in Vietnam, if you mention the
food
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 delivery systems, people here usually suggest to you 3 popular
companies
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 which are Grab, Shoppe
Food
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, and Beamin. These
companies
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 compete in
food
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 delivery systems, and they
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 have their own uniforms. People can easily realise that the Grab
uniform
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 is green colour, Shoppe
Food
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 is red colours and the mint colour is for Beamin. In conclusion, the
uniform
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 idea for a good idea. I really hope that every
company
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 has their own uniforms because it brings many benefits for both
companies
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 and individuals.
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