The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations, during 2010-2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The given bar chart provides data about what number of
Catholics
lived
either in China, India, the Correct pronoun usage
who lived
Philippines
, Vietnam, Korea, and Japan
in the years 2010 and 2013.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the Philippines
had the biggest community of Catholics
living there, whereas
the smallest one was in Japan
.
In 2010, the Philippines
, as just said, had the most notable number of Catholics
, counting almost 76,000,000 people. The second greatest number was detained by India just followed by China, achieving together just around a fourth of the Philippines
' religious community. Next in line are Vietnam and Korea at approximately 5 million
and then
Japan
at just 400,000.
About 2013, the Philippines
had a slight decrease of roughly 4 million
just like Korea. The other countries' Catholic communities, instead
, notably grew, as China and India rose to 15 million
and 19 million
, respectively. Finally
, Vietnam and Japan
remained almost unchanged as the former declined by around 300,000 Catholics
whereas
the latter gained around 100,000 of them.Submitted by marianiculescu1103 on
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