Some people believe that teenager should always follow the examples of older people, whereas some believe it is natural in teenager to challenge what old people say. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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known
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for
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impulsivness
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impulsiveness
as well as
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recklessness
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seriously
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debatable
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they should always follow the same steps as older people or not. personally,
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believe it is the time for
experinces
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experiences
and taking risks .
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essay will discuss both points of
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Firstly
,
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the majority
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of people,especially older generations,believes that the youth must take the same path in
life
they had,
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knowing that they know better
as well as
had experienced a lot in
life
.Not only that
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but
also
they tend to accomplish
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own dreams and targets in
life
by
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the younger ones related to them to do so,as it is the only good thing in
life
.
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, statistics have been done by London
univeristy
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university
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declares
that 40
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of parents convinced that what they have been planning for their children is the best
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in
life
. On contrary,the younger generations, especially
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the
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millions
,who were born in
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the late
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80s, see that
this
period and phase in
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a persons
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persons
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life
is the most
convinient
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convenient
time to make mistakes in order to learn from them.To illustrate,
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teenagers will never learn how to be adults unless they know what is wrong and what is right.
additionlly
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additionally
, it is the time, when they are impulsive,
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reckless
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and
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stubborn
,
as a result
for
this
, forcing them to do
somthing
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something
they are not fully
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will only lead to
irresponsable
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irresponsible
individuals
as well as
poor character development. In my opinion,the disadvantages of following
older
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path
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the advantages,even if they know better.It is everyone’s right to make mistakes and
stumple
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struggle
in his journey of
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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